The Telescope

Gerkinman · May 16, 2011 09:37 AM

Yo dawg! Its over here!

After 2 years of stopping and starting, restarting the project, cancelling it, bringing it back, not touching it for months at a time and then finally crunching the last couple of weeks when I could have been playing SC2, I humbly present The Telescope.

Its not what I had in my head originally 2 years ago, but I guess thats what happens when you drag out such a small project over such a long time.

Taking a break from Flash for a while, going to try to make my next short in Toon Boom for something different.

Anyway, feel free to throw me some abuse.

rtil · May 16, 2011 10:55 AM

the kid with the telescope , i didnt really understand why he so quickly went along with whatever the blue kid wanted to do in the end after tossing the telescope he found and making him cry. but ill take the cartoon for what it is, im not gonna try to read into it, it seemed more like a visual feast if anything.

Blordow · May 16, 2011 11:03 AM

visually it was nice i suppose, but hard to sit through. i give it / 5

W.A.S.I.M. · May 16, 2011 11:08 AM

Quote from: Blordowvisually it was nice i suppose, but hard to sit through. i give it / 5

Gerkinman · May 16, 2011 11:59 AM

Quote from: rtilthe kid with the telescope , i didnt really understand why he so quickly went along with whatever the blue kid wanted to do in the end after tossing the telescope he found and making him cry. but ill take the cartoon for what it is, im not gonna try to read into it, it seemed more like a visual feast if anything.

I find too many cartoons have kids as whiney little bitches. Not a fan. I know when I was a kid I had a pretty short attention span and moved on to the next thing pretty quick.

Are "nice" visuals all it takes to get a 3/5 from you guys now? You ladies are getting soft

GhostingFish · May 16, 2011 02:53 PM

it was ok..

cipher · May 16, 2011 04:23 PM

I have no idea what just happened.

but I liked it.

sev · May 16, 2011 06:43 PM

it was okay but i think it needed more anime

Crabarms · May 16, 2011 07:20 PM

I think its pretty cool.

creamcorn · May 16, 2011 09:21 PM

it was a nice, cute cartoon but the ending felt weird

what tril said

*rtil

Casey Pixmintro · May 16, 2011 09:27 PM

pretty good stuff, entertaining

Gerkinman · May 16, 2011 11:52 PM

Has become quite apparent I need to work more on telling a story without dialogue as a few people seem to have no idea what was going on. Then again a lot seemed to pick it up with no explanation. Why is there no middle ground D=

Blordow · May 17, 2011 12:55 AM

gratz on the frontpage

Gerkinman · May 17, 2011 01:10 AM

Quote from: Blordowgratz on the frontpage

Cheers mate, tho im sure the fact Mindchamber has been listening to me blather on about it for the last 2 years had something to do with it ha ha.

lenko · May 17, 2011 01:51 AM

Quote from: rtilthe kid with the telescope , i didnt really understand why he so quickly went along with whatever the blue kid wanted to do in the end after tossing the telescope he found and making him cry.

exactly what i was going to say. also i kinda wish your animation had a bit more bounce to it and a few shots went by a bit fast as well

other than that it was pretty cool and interesting to watch

lenko · May 17, 2011 04:08 AM

oh yeah i wasn't too fond of the music

Gerkinman · May 17, 2011 08:21 AM

Quoteexactly what i was going to say. also i kinda wish your animation had a bit more bounce to it and a few shots went by a bit fast as well

Yeah, I think my next film will probably go more towards using bouncing tweens for pose transitions rather then distorted pieces of vector god knows whats.

Quoteoh yeah i wasn't too fond of the music

Chiptunes are a love or hate thing I suppose. Especially when it comes to tracks that aren't supposed to sound like dance tracks.

logen · May 17, 2011 02:57 PM

Quote from: Gerkinman
Quoteexactly what i was going to say. also i kinda wish your animation had a bit more bounce to it and a few shots went by a bit fast as well
Yeah, I think my next film will probably go more towards using bouncing tweens for pose transitions rather then distorted pieces of vector god knows whats.

Quoteoh yeah i wasn't too fond of the music
Chiptunes are a love or hate thing I suppose. Especially when it comes to tracks that aren't supposed to sound like dance tracks.

chiptunes are great, but i have to agree with lenko, this specific piece was rather irritating
nice animation tho

Mew_User · May 17, 2011 07:01 PM

I liked the music and the story a lot. The visuals were great too.

CVG · May 19, 2011 03:31 AM

Oh hey you finished it! Congrats man! At first I thought the music was very grating and annoying but as it continued on I grew accustomed to it so that was okay; and I saw how you had spaced the scenes to go with the music a bit which was a nice effect and helped the cartoon work together with it over time. There were a few parts where there was way too much pattern and like colors that I couldn't see the picture clearly though...it happened at the beginning like when the mom flicked a cigarette and yelled at the kid and then the people and city when viewed in the telescope scenes. Animation wise there were some short cuts I caught in the movement and poses to poses but they didn't really distract me enough to notice them as I was mostly watching the cartoon as the story went on (it was more like something I saw as when I put on my "animator vision" and started looking at it visually and technically on the 2nd or 3rd watching haha). But I did like the story a lot. The way I read it this friendless kid who lives with an abusive mom finds a simple telescope and keeps his innocent nature and imagination alive but envisioning a bunch of amazing things through the telescope. Its only when the blue kids doesn't see it, does he realize he's been only imagining things. Then the kid in the process finds a friend and goes off to play with him...if anything added I would have liked it if the telescope had been more responsible for bringing them together like as if the object was not just thrown away but a vessel for them both to interact and see things differently. Like if the blue kid actually saw different crazy things and the boy realizes they both were seeing things creatively in their own ways, and thus became friends because of the telescope. But anyways yeah I liked it and it definitely shows the hard work and patience you put into each bit...the coloring and shaded gradient in all the parts must have been very time-consuming. Also heh I like that disgusting mom when she stuck her hand into her crotch and sniffed it lmao, overall a good short.