Art

[Miawshloubedadish]

Alright, so I've been listening a song on repeat and forced myself to draw something I would color. The thing is, I'm rusted, I am trying a new style and my anatomy is shit. So I would like having critics on it while it is undone. I left the sketch of it paler under the lineart so you can get the idea of the pattern and such. Things not blacklined will be transparent.



(yeah first time trying futuristic stuff and I though of the design on the spot.)

EDIT EDIT EDIT: I love drawing long and thin. Just warning you.

[Philip K Dick]

Not Bad Bro!!

[retrosmash]

very good!  I'm betting it'll look even better once you clear all the reference lines used for the anatomy and color in everything properly.
I pretty much suck shit at art myself, so i can't offer much serious criticism here.

[adamant]

the lower portion of the front leg is disaligned
legs can't really bend like that

[rtil]

i'd love to see a human being try to attempt anything like that pose in the first place. but that's actually what i like about it. cartoon characters can break the rules of bones being 'broken' and such. nothing really bothers me about the anatomy except his left (our right) hand. his pinky and ring finger are kind of floating off in weird places.

[Sinitron]

i am sorry girl i am afraid i must charm you for it is my job

[CoolDrMoney]

Very good peice even if I dont personally like how "sharp and jagged" it is, but thats me.

The only problem is like Rtil said is the hands, the other one behind the knee doesnt seem to be connected to anything. Given how his wrist is bent and the position of his hand you should be able to see some arm behind his hip. The other hand is just a porportion/perspective problem I feel. Look at the way his thumb and index finger is, then look at the rest of them. His fingers shouldnt be "Comin at you" they should be on the same plane as the finger and thumb if ya catch what I mean. I understand you thought the hand pose probably looked kinda cool but if you look at it...it looks wrong. In a way it looks like the pinky is just sticking out of her arm. So just fix the hands and I think youll have a really nice drawing there.

And I do love the pose and the design, very nice even if I dont particularly care for the style I can still respect an obviously nice piece of work that took some effort.

[Miawshloubedadish]

I am very pleased to receive such encouraging critics, thank you so much! I changed the inclinaison of the front leg a bit, added a part of the arm to be visible near the hip, and I tried to fix the hand. I'll admit the hand part confused me (B-Cube helped me understand, my english fail but I'm still learning) but I don't know if I fixed it correctly.

Thank you so much again, I would have never noticed this by myself.

Here's how it look so far. I would love to hear your opinion on it. When it will be good, I'll start coloring it

[Sinitron]

Her left leg, viewers' right, looks... kinda weird but I'm not sure why.

sdftgxz

[adamant]

Her left leg, viewers' right, looks... kinda weird but I'm not sure why.

sdftgxz

that's what i was talking about!

[Fuzz]

Her left leg, viewers' right, looks... kinda weird but I'm not sure why.

sdftgxz

I think it's because both of the knees are different. one is pointy and one is curved.

[mishkamash]

i see the right hand is kinda messy lookin
though it's a very good attempt i like it!

[Miawshloubedadish]

One knee has a protector on it, which is why it has a round end. Maybe the legs are too inclined? Or is it more on the ankle level that is too inclined? Any suggestion on how I could fix the messy hand? Because I admit I don't really know how to fix it more than that.

It would be very helpful! And thank you again for the critics, I swear this is the only place where I get them...

[rtil]

i think re-drawing his left (our right) foot to be more angled in towards the body would probably solve a lot of the issues people are having with the pose.

[Miawshloubedadish]

I drew it all up again instead of tweaking it in photoshop. I tried to take in consideration what everyone told me up to now. If it's acceptable (I know a drawing will never, ever, be perfect in any point) I'll start the coloring.

[rtil]

you should just go ahead and color it. after a while it gets to a point where tweaking starts to make the drawing worse. and toned coloring can add a lot of dimension to a drawing that linework never could.

[Miawshloubedadish]

Alright. I'm glad I posted it here, it really helped me. I'll start the coloring now

[Loathsome]

Man, I recognize your drawingstyle from somewhere. Do you have a DA? It's possible that I've gone to it sometime...

[bcube]

shes got an sa
I showed you her sa once
you called her an anime fanatic or something and then I had to tell you that that was her old work and that her new work is more cartoony

[MRat]

I love it, but pointy chins freak me the fuck out.