Friendship will last forever!

[psi43]

http://www.thebackalleys.com/ok/public/finn.png
   
     I made that in Flash really quick when Finn, Erik and Dennis were over at my house to celebrate my birthday early.
 It was really fun, we made a LAN party, haven't slept for the past 36 hours wohow.
 
 About the actual piece, it's my practical electronics teacher and Finn. They always argue with eachother, but yeah, everyone kind of argues with this teacher from time to time. It's meant to be sarcastic.

[Philip K Dick]

Hmm... What program do you use to record? I ran your Tom Fern clip through Audacity and was able to remove most of the background noise/static. Then applying a bit of the Low Pass Filter tool made your voice sound closer in proximity, and I think it definitely turned out better as a result. Attached File  Tom_Fern.mp3 ( 1.16mb ) Number of downloads: 2

Most any decent recording software carries these tools. ...Though if you're using Windows Sound Recorder, shame on you.

Regarding the performance itself -- Giving a strong delivery of a serious monologue is HARD, but for the most part you sold the emotion and character really well. A very believable read, and I was thoroughly impressed. You pace yourself well, make good use of word emphasis, and never sounded too monotonous.

As Shadowfox noted, you do have a habit of really dropping your energy/projection and fading at the end of a few sentences. Now, this can be okay to a degree, but it becomes a problem when the listener has difficultly making out exactly what it is that you're saying, so watch out for that. Clarity is essential.

A couple notes on the actual dialogue:

Put a brief pause after "One day I'm robbing a bank..." That split-second pause gets the listener expecting something, and it makes the rest of the line mean that much more.

"Until a heist went off wrong." is only line that you seemed to stumble through. You started too high, and then paced it somewhat awkwardly. Wording probably isn't the best though. It might be better as "Until that one heist." or "Until one heist went wrong.".
Another tip, I often like to put a sigh inbetween when moving from a positive line to a negative one. I find that it really aids the tone transition, and while still providing a natural flow.

"King of the city, he was."
*sigh*
"Until..."

And lastly, it sounds like a mouse-click made it's way into the very end of your last line. Not everyone will notice small things like that, but it's still something to be careful about.

I hope you keep at this though. You've got great ability and I wanna hear more from you.


Onto your Mario.

I HATE Mario. But at the same time, that clip was excellent. Interestingly, it lacked any major background static. Could maaaaybe use a bit more energy on the "Hoo! Hoo!" but it's a superb imitation none the less. Now the tricky and more valuable part though, is the ability to apply that same "Mario-esque" delivery to dialogue that Charles Martinet hasn't delivered before.

[Necronomitr0n]

I'm going to take a shot in the dark and say that you're the guy in the orange shirt

[rtil]

^ lmao