ghost out part 3

[redmongoose]

ok so I have the swf almost finished with and I just need to organize a few things and touch shit up but I'd like some constructive criticism.  Tell me what you think and if you have any suggestions let me know because I want to make this bit as good as it can be

here are the first two if you havent seen them
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/238467
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/295968

[bcube]

woah, that was pretty great.
the lines are kinda wobbly and sketchy but I think it goes well with the whole feel of the series.

[ZekeySpaceyLizard]

i'm dirty bill

from cootie hill

i never took a bath

and never will

[CoolDrMoney]

I cant wtach the third one for some reason but the first 2 are very nice!

[mishkamash]

it's very cool red

[Michelle]

very very stylish

this might be a downer but I actually think the voice performance in the last two parts was waaaaay better than the third. in the third your voice changes a lot and kind of shys away

otherwise i really love the sound and the weirdo dream sequence part

[adamant]

this might be a downer but I actually think the voice performance in the last two parts was waaaaay better than the third. in the third your voice changes a lot and kind of shys away

age does have its side effects

[Michelle]

red old-man goose

[wps]

you showed me da third one
but i never saw the first two to be honest
it sure is fuckin magnificent, good job

[rtil]

i don't have much to say cuz i have already seen most of it but i love the ending and it fit perfectly with the music. i think the new narration takes a little away from the atmosphere, but it's necessary for people who don't know the story. other than that, i say submit it. you don't want to overwork it. my only thing i'd say to change is that the subtitles overlap eachother at the beginning sequence. unless it was intentional

also

age does have its side effects

not really, the only thing that stopped mel blanc's voice was death

[redmongoose]

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/455588

vote 5

[rtil]

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Author C

[bcube]

Voted 5 and got a friend of mine to vote 5 too

[psi43]

Thanks for voting, rtil! Your experience points have already been deposited for today - thanks for doing the overtime!

Your experience gave you a voting power of 7.03 votes. Your blam and protection points gave you an additional 16% of your experience power, meaning that your total vote power was worth 8.16 votes!

The more experience points you have, combined with BLAM and PROTECTION points, the more your vote is worth!
Author C

Pathetic!! I 5'd it with a vp of 9.06, 9.61 and 5.75..!

[redmongoose]

daily 4th  

[psi43]

you picked like the worst day to submit it lmfao. 2 Animations by HDD (who's a pretty good animator) and something else that got a high score, too. Usually 4.09 is a safe daily feature lmao.

[redmongoose]

wish I'd been paying attention

[wps]

the extra features were neat as well!

[redmongoose]

omg

fp

[mishkamash]

omg

fp

congrats man!