Interesting idea. Here's how I played through:
- Walk By
- Eat Lunch Inside (though admittedly I was imagining "find someplace quiet inside to eat" not "cafeteria", so I imagine the full version would give me enough description to realize that was the choice I was making.)
Chiharu +1
Kioku +2
Dance Flag
= END 2
- I Understand
My reaction to the story was a bit of surprise that Kioku was taking such a considerable interest in the MC so quickly, to the degree that they might be hopping in the sack ("possible H-scene") after they've just met. Again, I imagine that in a more fully-written final form it might not seem so quick, but from this outline I can't tell if that was your intention or not. In any case, the revelation in End 2 was quite dramatic and unexpected. I liked it for its emotional impact, and was intrigued by the twist it brought to the story. In the end, I think I chose "I Understand" not necessarily because I was pleased with her decision (I'm still undecided on that), but because I understood why she would have made such a choice. There would likely still be a lot of work (and drama!) in bringing me to feel something more than sympathy for her, but I would definitely be interested in navigating that story.
In the end, it sounds like it could make for an interesting VN. I think I'm still quite enamored of the "choose one girl to pursue out of the group" style of VNs (do they call them "harem" games? Sounds so sordid...), so I admit I immediately assumed the game would be about picking which girl I want to pursue romantically. That may have colored my opinions, but I've only played a few VNs or VN-like games...
Is that at all helpful?
- Walk By
- Eat Lunch Inside (though admittedly I was imagining "find someplace quiet inside to eat" not "cafeteria", so I imagine the full version would give me enough description to realize that was the choice I was making.)
Chiharu +1
Kioku +2
Dance Flag
= END 2
- I Understand
My reaction to the story was a bit of surprise that Kioku was taking such a considerable interest in the MC so quickly, to the degree that they might be hopping in the sack ("possible H-scene") after they've just met. Again, I imagine that in a more fully-written final form it might not seem so quick, but from this outline I can't tell if that was your intention or not. In any case, the revelation in End 2 was quite dramatic and unexpected. I liked it for its emotional impact, and was intrigued by the twist it brought to the story. In the end, I think I chose "I Understand" not necessarily because I was pleased with her decision (I'm still undecided on that), but because I understood why she would have made such a choice. There would likely still be a lot of work (and drama!) in bringing me to feel something more than sympathy for her, but I would definitely be interested in navigating that story.
In the end, it sounds like it could make for an interesting VN. I think I'm still quite enamored of the "choose one girl to pursue out of the group" style of VNs (do they call them "harem" games? Sounds so sordid...), so I admit I immediately assumed the game would be about picking which girl I want to pursue romantically. That may have colored my opinions, but I've only played a few VNs or VN-like games...
Is that at all helpful?