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Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: YungJazz on July 25, 2009 06:22 AM
If you're wondering why the forum has been devoid of pointless racial arguments by everybody's favorite large, hairy black man (Not Lenko, ME you silly), this is why.

Just for old times sake, I'll post my WIP on here and j

It's part of a 2-part story about a company that teaches people magic for exorbitant prices and at it's helm are a lazy white guy named Dimitri who doesn't really do anything but smoke weed and read newspaper comics, and his idiot step brother, and a red-headed sociopathic niglet named Romeo who does things to fuck up Dimitri's reputation for fun. It has cameos from my previous flash movies like Kiara and Jazz, but they're in pretty different roles, such as Kiara being a shitty contract killer as opposed to a generic demon fighter like in....DevilSlayer.... AAANYWAY.... This company deals with the city's corrupt, fucked up church community as well as pissed off every-men *cough, cough* Jazz *cough*

The shitty commercial intro was made months ago, but the next scene is the style I went with for the rest of the movie (I'm at 6 out of 8 minutes finished) I'd like to finish it this week.  So yes, there's way more done than this.
Anybody who knows how to add subtitles to a movie that implements v-cam gets a pity fuck






Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: tmk on July 25, 2009 06:47 AM
you might want to lower the volume of the music and screams in the background because I could barely understand some of what the two guys were saying.
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: lenko on July 25, 2009 08:09 AM
its alright. i really liked the shading/lighting/colour choices

what i dont like is the crude humour (pointless dick and fart jokes) and the fact that its still not really clear what happens in the 'commercial'

also romeo just sorta whispers 'scatter maggots'. it'd would work a lot better if he yelled it
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: lenko on July 25, 2009 09:05 AM
jesus christ squeef dood!
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: Fuzz on July 25, 2009 09:09 AM
I like the fact that you have a play button now.
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: lenko on July 25, 2009 09:17 AM
Quote from: Fuzzim gonna completely ignore the animation, art, sound, concept, writing and story and just comment on a play button

Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: Philip K Dick on July 25, 2009 11:39 AM
wpow holy shit squeef i could have said that any better
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: YungJazz on July 25, 2009 03:33 PM
Haha Fascinating speech, Squeef, we're all impressed. To address one thing, my series was out a year and a half before the first Freetown toon. For you to say my futurristic style is ripped from that is bullshit. The rest of it was funny as hell.
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: funzop on July 25, 2009 04:23 PM
i didnt really enjoy it at all the animation was really kinda clunky and the art style looked really undevolped
pretty much what lenko said as well
and what squf said

also you need to learn to lip sync
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: funzop on July 25, 2009 10:38 PM
Quote from: squfar
Quote from: YungJazzHaha Fascinating speech, Squeef, we're all impressed. To address one thing, my series was out a year and a half before the first Freetown toon. For you to say my futurristic style is ripped from that is bullshit. The rest of it was funny as hell.
oh so instead of using your head and thinking about it, you are just going to go "haha what a dumb cracka dat shuyt waz wack dawg lulz ima g0 draw sum fuckan animE"
good job i am sure you will get very far in life and discover many things

lmaoo

Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: ZekeySpaceyLizard on July 26, 2009 01:15 AM
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Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: DrRumack on July 26, 2009 01:35 AM
Quote from: nonzop
Quote from: squfar
Quote from: YungJazzHaha Fascinating speech, Squeef, we're all impressed. To address one thing, my series was out a year and a half before the first Freetown toon. For you to say my futurristic style is ripped from that is bullshit. The rest of it was funny as hell.
oh so instead of using your head and thinking about it, you are just going to go "haha what a dumb cracka dat shuyt waz wack dawg lulz ima g0 draw sum fuckan animE"
good job i am sure you will get very far in life and discover many things

lmaoo


Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: billy on July 26, 2009 01:47 AM
well, i like anime i guess. i thought most of the art and characters looked pretty good, the pacing was a little suck though. the animation was decent, but the timing of everything just felt off. i hated the voice acting, and the plot and stuff. i feel like you're trying to break down walls but you're doing it in a counter-productive manner. i don't know where you were trying to go with the religious themes, but from what i saw it seemed like it could only go to "jesus christ is our savior and everyone should love him" or "god doesn't exist also fuck america"

focus on characters and their personalities instead of their race
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: GRINACE on July 26, 2009 06:02 AM
Quote from: lenkabiscajesus christ squeef dood!


Believe me, thats nothing.
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: Fuzz on July 26, 2009 06:35 AM
Quote from: lenkabisca
Quote from: Fuzzim gonna completely ignore the animation, art, sound, concept, writing and story and just comment on a play button
Hey, it's an improvement over his earlier submissions here on TBA.
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: InsaneX on July 27, 2009 05:02 PM
i think youd be better off making hentai galleries
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: rtil on July 27, 2009 05:17 PM
it's made some decent headway. i feel like all the animation is there for the sake of movement. none of it feels very authentic. like the guy picking his nose is just a loop and he's got his entire hand in a fist except his index finger, i've never seen anyone pick their nose with that kind of rigidness. and the girl who points at the screen and clenches one finger at a time while keep thing others still, that's not even possible. every movement doesn't have any follow through to it either. they just fall into this key and there's no bounce or anything. it's kind of weird when you go from fluid movement to a complete standstill. you need to ease in to it. i also found the dick/fart jokes to be unfunny and unecessary

aaaaaaaaaaaand the font is still missing on the "shut up and evolve" poster by the guy takin a crap unless you wanted it to be arial which i highly doubt
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: billy on July 28, 2009 10:28 AM
break your texts

ctrl-b
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: billy on July 29, 2009 11:30 AM
if i posted the same flash everyone would be praising me

jazz your big problem is you were born black i'm sorry but there's nothing you can do about it mj tried and they killed him for it
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: psi43 on July 29, 2009 10:50 PM
i dont like how even your whitest character acts black
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: lenko on July 29, 2009 11:40 PM
you keep saying how you dont really like the opening segment but you're leaving it in anyways? why not change it up a little? i think alexir looks a bit sloppy when he just tweens in compared to romeo standing up
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: Daveb0t on July 30, 2009 04:58 PM
hey youngjazz I wanna see your dick
Title: Xenophobe Production Thread
Post by: Philip K Dick on July 30, 2009 11:20 PM
black