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Title: I have lost myself...
Post by: Orangebeef on July 10, 2009 01:31 AM
okay so I wanted to make a new orangebeef movie so this is what I have so far

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/090709/77056_Officerbeef.php (http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/090709/77056_Officerbeef.php)

I tried putting lots of effort into this movie unlike my others but now that i've done this much work on it , it just seems like there's nothing special about it and its lame

it doesn't seem amusing or funny to me at all

even though the "animation" is better it's still shit compared to

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/340984 (http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/340984)
http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/450799 (http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/450799)

so what do you guys think of it? (maybe I just don't like it because I've watched it so many times to look for problems etc)
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Post by: Khawner_ on July 10, 2009 01:41 AM
I like it alot personally, there's not anything really wrong with it. But if you were to nitpick at really small things, Maybe you could ease the tweens in the beggining when the "camera" so to speak is lowering to the road. I don't really know how to describe things correctly, so sorry if I was no help.  
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Post by: Wasim on July 10, 2009 02:28 PM
that was nice so far

finish it
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 10, 2009 09:13 PM
does it seem funny/silly at all? because that's what i want to make
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Post by: f0d on July 10, 2009 09:52 PM
even though visually it looks fine and the animation you attempted is nice and smooth, i am gonna nitpick

the reason this isnt funny and isnt going to be funny is your characters arent real characters. theyre personal forum avitars that you animate. its that same old stale clock crew formula "hey im gonna animate a representation of myself because i have no better ideas and its easy!" im not seeing much of a storyline or purpose other than to practice animation, which is fine i guess but try animating a real person or something else instead of that chicken leg... or whatever it is.

also the song has been used too often before. if you want it to be funny i suggest either using dialog instead of a music video, or just changing the music.

is stagbeetle still around? i love that guy :'(
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 11, 2009 02:12 AM
are you saying my other movies are unfunny as well

and yeah stagbeetle has nice movies like, some of them are funny to just about everyone who watches them and the only humor they contain isn't some lame inside jokes but after submitting 1 frame flashes for 2 years i dont quite know how to do this
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 11, 2009 03:53 PM
come on everybody i need your help...
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Post by: f0d on July 14, 2009 06:13 PM
Quote from: Orangebeefare you saying my other movies are unfunny as well
yes but that doesnt mean theyre bad

im just saying switch up your style a little bit and it could make it a lot funnier
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Post by: psi43 on July 14, 2009 08:11 PM
Quote from: f0dthe reason this isnt funny and isnt going to be funny is your characters arent real characters. theyre personal forum avitars that you animate. its that same old stale clock crew formula "hey im gonna animate a representation of myself because i have no better ideas and its easy!" im not seeing much of a storyline or purpose other than to practice animation, which is fine i guess but try animating a real person or something else instead of that chicken leg... or whatever it is.

are you trying to say "this isn't funny because the characters aren't looking like humans" because that would be utterly stupid.
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Post by: Daveb0t on July 14, 2009 08:18 PM
What every flash movie needs:
1. a story/script
2. voice acting
3. character development
4. human characters, not chicken wings, stars or any shit like that

OrtizanimationZ.gif
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Post by: tmk on July 14, 2009 08:19 PM
he's saying it isn't funny because the avatar-based characters are generic, uninspired alternatives to characters that can perform actions other than hopping from place to place

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Post by: creamcorn on July 14, 2009 08:38 PM
blarg
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 14, 2009 09:30 PM
or can they
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Post by: psi43 on July 14, 2009 11:09 PM
Quote from: tmkhe's saying it isn't funny because the avatar-based characters are generic, uninspired alternatives to characters that can perform actions other than hopping from place to place

i don't see how an orange beef character is "generic".
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Post by: tmk on July 15, 2009 12:04 AM
Quote from: psi43i don't see how an orange beef character is "generic".

no? then I suppose you're either unfamiliar with the large number of flashes on ng featuring screen name based characters (which seems unlikely based on your avatar) or you're having trouble with this pesky english language

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Post by: Orangebeef on July 15, 2009 01:16 AM
i made this username when i was 11 lmao

and t he character too
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Post by: Daveb0t on July 15, 2009 01:20 AM
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fart.ngfiles.com%2Fimages%2F10%2Fdaveb0rt_song-of-chaos.jpg&hash=38181384cf5181aec3e817b311a707209f6177e1)
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Post by: f0d on July 15, 2009 04:54 PM
Quote from: tmkhe's saying it isn't funny because the avatar-based characters are generic, uninspired alternatives to characters that can perform actions other than hopping from place to place
^^^this


im sorry but dialog is not funny if its done with speakonia and characters are not relatable when they dont have a well defined face.

Quote from: Orangebeefi made this username when i was 11 lmao

and t he character too

all the more reason to expand your horizons

again i think you're a dam good animator which is why im suggesting you take it a step further than what you have always done, purely for creativity's sake
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 15, 2009 09:53 PM
I'm happy making beef movies as it is

and I know why this movie isn't funny, not because avatars gay bouncing shit isn't funny but because I haven't put any lame animated .gif s tweening around!! I had a good idea for the ending, though

also would it be better if I did actual voice acting as horrid as it may be
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Post by: Daveb0t on July 15, 2009 10:13 PM
speakonia is a wonderous program
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Post by: f0d on July 16, 2009 06:55 PM
Quote from: Orangebeefalso would it be better if I did actual voice acting as horrid as it may be
yes i think so

either that or get a voice actor to do it
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Post by: ZekeySpaceyLizard on July 17, 2009 01:49 AM
you can make an avatar character funny


just give it a personality. thats all it needs, really. a soul.
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Post by: ZekeySpaceyLizard on July 17, 2009 01:58 AM
Quote from: f0dim sorry but dialog is not funny if its done with speakonia and characters are not relatable when they dont have a well defined face.

(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.etc3dot.com%2Fimages%2FLucy_and_Charlie_Brown.jpg&hash=fb40ec976afcc39ab58c444bed8f03e2134bd6c5)
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fimages.starpulse.com%2FPhotos%2FPreviews%2FPowerpuff-Girls-cn02.jpg&hash=a6b4513f6317c2b34f96604c04a8ab16c50c3a99)
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 17, 2009 09:16 PM
i don't even use speakonia i just use text, but that isn't much better is it loL
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Post by: Orangebeef on July 17, 2009 11:18 PM
the title of this thread is gay