so i've been away for a few months, havn't had access to flash in nearly a year
anyway i havn't animated in an age and i really dont know wha the fuck im doing. this is something im working on so comments and critique are rly appreciated
i wrote the song just for the cartoon
http://theincrediblebox.deviantart.com/art/adds-110681779 (http://theincrediblebox.deviantart.com/art/adds-110681779)
his fingers didnt look like they were typing
and his eyes kinda look like Family Guy eyes
the folds in the shirt look like crap
Quote from: MrScriblamthe folds in the shirt look like crap
^^
also it says "an story from freekC" isnt it "A story from FreekC"
Other than that the rest of the flash looks pretty nice so far. I like the variety in detail of the backgrounds.
Quote from: Zekeyand his eyes kinda look like Family Guy eyes
ya if theres anything i would change its the eyes
ok thanks guys ill try some different eyes and iron his shirt
Darken your colors a little since the first few shots are set during night. People tend to have there lights off at night while in front of a screen at night time.
Unless the lights are on than show the light bulb in some kind of subtle way.
Your animation also appears to be intended to be cartoony but it is not exaggerated anyway.
Make your drawings funnier and try to include as much frame by frame as possible.
heyy mightydein glad to see you finally sign up here hows it goin buddy
Quote from: MightydeinPeople tend to have there lights off at night while in front of a screen at night time.
what really?
i always have my light on at night
depends on if i need to type, or if my roommate is asleep
i dropped that flash cuz i showed the script to some people and i realised it just wasnt funny and it made no sense
this is what im working on now
http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/160209/373...reyesurgery.php (http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/160209/3733_lasereyesurgery.php)
looking good.
when his face hits the glass
it looks really static
have like 1 or 2 frames where his cheeks squish out and then in or something real quick
so it looks like he's rammed into something and not just APPEARED in front of it
if you catch my drift
i agree with zeke
you could add a few more in betweens and sort of ease him in. think what happens when you set a tween's easing to -100. thats what the motion should look like, only in FBF. then once he's up near the glass you could start from a normal looking pose and in 5 or 6 frames exaggerate the squashing against the glass. then on the last drawing just leave him squashed, he doesnt need to spring back in. would look perfect.
the background is nice and detailed but you could try some sort of perspective... unless you're going for the flattened look in which case looks great
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thanks guys, yea i get ya. add more frames when his face is actually on the glass to show it squishing up
his head is shaped like stupid
fix that
I liked the music.
Nice screename for DA by the way.
Quote from: RichChaphis head is shaped like stupid
fix that
im sure he totally remembers this thread from months ago