I'm doing another comic (because, you know, I enjoy that).
Anyway, on the left is the rough sketch I did for the comic. Usually, for my comics, I'll just settle for doing all the lines in a single stroke and going with the wobbly lines caused by my very unsteady hand.
But this time, I decided I'd give cleaning the lines up a try. I have to clean up a couple spots here and there, and (possibly) add color, but other than that, this panel is pretty much finished.
I'd love for some critique.
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi231.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fee181%2Ftopcatyo%2FGettingbetteratlineart-1.png&hash=ea08a8dbc75b4dea0c7a1b47890280a36536c690)
Panel 2 (http://www.thebackalleys.com/forum/index.php?s=&showtopic=3520&view=findpost&p=73836)
I like it. I like it a lot. His little side burn in the NEW one shouldn't be shaded that way with all of the other shading style. And his hair seems to be missing a piece.
Quote from: FuzzI like it. I like it a lot.
Thanks
QuoteHis little side burn in the NEW one shouldn't be shaded that way with all of the other shading style.
I see what you mean and I definitely agree. I'll fix that
QuoteAnd his hair seems to be missing a piece.
That's mostly just how I draw my hair. I like the way it looks but it does tend to be a bitch to color.
I did the second panel today.
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi231.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fee181%2Ftopcatyo%2FGettingbetteratlineart2.png&hash=d996ff390a26b1695104f5c65d929970c05087b9)
I like the new linearts, youve obviously improved, but I dont really like how you use the tones in the new panels. It kinda throws me off but I dont exactly know why
Quote from: BizarreCubeI like the new linearts, youve obviously improved, but I dont really like how you use the tones in the new panels. It kinda throws me off but I dont exactly know why
Maybe because they don't give much contrast to the blank white. The lineart still looks good though
Quote from: BizarreCubeI like the new linearts, youve obviously improved, but I dont really like how you use the tones in the new panels. It kinda throws me off but I dont exactly know why
Maybe it's because it looks more like a comic you would see in a newspaper than you would on the internet?
no
its the rough transition from smooth lines to simple dots
I think
Quote from: BizarreCubeI like the new linearts, youve obviously improved, but I dont really like how you use the tones in the new panels. It kinda throws me off but I dont exactly know why
Thanks
As for the dots, I'm still trying to figure out how to make them really good. I like the way they look, but I need to work on not using them too much, because otherwise the screen looks very crowded all of a sudden.
Today I got rid of a lot of areas where the dots are in and it's a lot easier to focus on teh picture now.
Quote from: BizarreCubeno
its the rough transition from smooth lines to simple dots
I think
I did reduce the amount of dots in the first picture quite a bit since I posted that this morning. Do you think it looks any better?
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fi231.photobucket.com%2Falbums%2Fee181%2Ftopcatyo%2FClipboard02.jpg&hash=5aa4d2e31c24b883a354418fd4c4cf2a84563ff7)
His pants dots still need work.
i liked the first one with more dots more
I think the dots need to be a bit more clustered but that just may be my taste or something I dont know
ahhhh
guys come on COMMENT ON THESE DOTS IM GOING CRAZY HERE
Quote from: Squeefi liked the first one with more dots more
I put the dots in too many things that really shouldn't have needed and they looked to sketchy in my opinion :(
Quote from: BizarreCubeI think the dots need to be a bit more clustered but that just may be my taste or something I dont know
ahhhh
guys come on COMMENT ON THESE DOTS IM GOING CRAZY HERE
I actually would've made the pattern for the dots more clustered when I first made it if I could, but when I put them any close it'd become just a great sheet. I don't know if I should've positioned the dots differently but this is the closest I could get the dots together to make them still dots.
I still need to look into it.
really nice, I like it a lot.
i say leave the dots just to make bcube go insane
Quote from: rtili say leave the dots just to make bcube go insane
Hahaha, will do
By the way, I have finished the comic. You can read it here:
http://www.thebackalleys.com/forum/index.php?showtopic=3524 (http://www.thebackalleys.com/forum/index.php?showtopic=3524)
Quote from: rtili say leave the dots just to make bcube go insane
rtil whyyyy
i say leave the dots if you want it to look like ass
Quote from: siniTron Bonnei say leave the dots if you want it to look like ass
I actually like it more with more dots.