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Title: Comic criticism
Post by: Galloglasses on November 4, 2007 05:52 PM
Yeah i'm back again, not to sure what to think about the new lay out, but I like it better then the last one.

I've been wanting to do webcomics for quite some time and have a few concepts lined up asides from my main one. One of which is Trinity, a spoof secondary comic i'll be making for the sake of improving my art before doing my main Inquisitoria idea.... As you can see, I need the practice:

(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fimg48.imageshack.us%2Fimg48%2F6590%2Ftrinitycopyec5.png&hash=d30cb1c42f384d1ca93bedb30912d4668a574eae)
(https://thebackalleys.com/forum/proxy.php?request=http%3A%2F%2Fimg525.imageshack.us%2Fimg525%2F1153%2Ftrinity2copyan5.png&hash=2df0bae86d5520807bfabb7000c50dce35ce4127)

Criticise away. Also, I know the armour is inaccurate, i'm going for simplicity here.
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: anigen on November 4, 2007 06:03 PM
the coloring is decent, but the characters look stiff and certain parts of the body, like the fingers of the guy whos holding the torch, is completely messed up imo
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: zomfgbie on November 4, 2007 06:05 PM
made me lol
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: psi43 on November 4, 2007 06:06 PM
lmfao wow. Fuck you have improved. I remember when you joined the LL, your .fla sucked. This is pretty nice though.
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: Galloglasses on November 4, 2007 06:14 PM
Quote from: Psi43lmfao wow. Fuck you have improved. I remember when you joined the LL, your .fla sucked. This is pretty nice though.
It still does lol. Thanks man, I really wasn't expecting you to approve. Thanks guys
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: psi43 on November 4, 2007 06:47 PM
Quote from: Inquisitor Galloglasses
Quote from: Psi43lmfao wow. Fuck you have improved. I remember when you joined the LL, your .fla sucked. This is pretty nice though.
It still does lol. Thanks man, I really wasn't expecting you to approve. Thanks guys

Compared to your first .fla, it's a huge improvement.

Also, this has pretty much the webcomic standard, it's nicely made so why wouldn't I approve it ehe.
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: Sinitron on November 4, 2007 09:26 PM
Quote from: FreekCmade me lol
Are you gay?

Quote from: Psi43This is pretty nice though.
Are you blind?
Title: Comic criticism
Post by: rtil on November 4, 2007 10:26 PM
i have never seen your art before so i'll critique it from my typical standpoint
don't let the word bubbles get in the way of framing. in the first frame you have way too much empty space in the top for the huge word bubbles. crop it, then find a better way to fit the dialogue in.
in the second frame, you have too much going on. the guy going "huh?" and seeing the thing creeping around a wall should be done in a separate frame, or maybe even two more. you can't have two separate actions going on in a frame at the same time. it confuses your audience.
also be more bold with your color choices. the light from the fire should be much brighter on their faces, and the dark spots should be darker. make what is important pop out the most with the highest amount of contrast
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