A new comic featuring that chick and her alien, if you remember them:
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The alien wont actually show up for a bunch more pages and this is just establishing stuff, so nothing is really happening yet.
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let me know what you think
or critique me i guess
much appreciated
kisses
when she is waking up in the bed she does not look like she is that tired. overall it's a good establishing page though
i think the first panel should use darker tones, so the 2nd panel placed in front of it stands out more
also instead of white borders (i forgot the proper term) i think you should use black cuz the general tones of the comic are quite bright
other than that it's nicely drawn and reads well. what program are you using?
it sucks
i think its a good start. i like the pencil drawing of the girl a lot more than the digital drawing. what program are you using?
jk man its pretty dice
I like it, but I like your traditional art a loot more.
Quote from: rtilwhen she is waking up in the bed she does not look like she is that tired. overall it's a good establishing page though
Thanks for the advice!
Quote from: vegetai think the first panel should use darker tones, so the 2nd panel placed in front of it stands out more
also instead of white borders (i forgot the proper term) i think you should use black cuz the general tones of the comic are quite bright
other than that it's nicely drawn and reads well. what program are you using?
I tried to make the second panel darker. I guess I should make it even darker.
It's scanned inks in Photoshop
Quote from: Geminiit sucks
WHAT AAH I'LL KILL YOU
Quote from: shurai think its a good start. i like the pencil drawing of the girl a lot more than the digital drawing. what program are you using?
It's hard (at least for me) to capture the true emotion of a picture that you see with a pencil and inking it and it still feeling the same way.
It's scanned inks in Photoshop again!
Quote from: Geminijk man its pretty dice
Oh thank goodness.
Quote from: emanI like it, but I like your traditional art a loot more.
Guess I'll have to work on this!
Page three:
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The reason why this took so long is because I did another page three before realizing it sucked and deciding to do things differently.
Until I get/put up a website for these, I guess I'll keep posting them here and on my dA.
unless anyone opposes
the checker pattern on her bandana is extremely distracting. at thte very least it needs to be toned down to a lighter gray.
the resizing is affecting some of the textures, but don't worry it looks fine full-size. i am also working on a script for the forums that will allow you to view an image full-size by clicking on it, as well as dynamic resizing based on the page width.
Buh
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A page in which nothing happens.
People seemed to be having trouble seeing the satellite as a satellite in the second panel and saw a cityscape instead. (At least when it was all inks) Do you guys have that problem?
I also lightened her bandana in the page before this. (On dA)
i can see it just fine. even if it did look like buildings (which it kind of does i guess), we see the satellite in the 1st panel and we know that we're in space.
although, i think the staging for the 2nd panel could be more interesting. for new settings, i think it's better to have a large establishing shot, and then a smaller panel for where the action is taking place
Quote from: rtili can see it just fine. even if it did look like buildings (which it kind of does i guess), we see the satellite in the 1st panel and we know that we're in space.
although, i think the staging for the 2nd panel could be more interesting. for new settings, i think it's better to have a large establishing shot, and then a smaller panel for where the action is taking place
On the next page (spoilers) there's going to be a bunch of extreme close ups of him hooking in to the satellite, and then a big shot showing the Earth underneath. Would that work, or should I work out a way to put it on this page?
sounds good to me
oh the alien ship finally shows up! :] although yeah I thought that was a bunch of buildings and a moon in the 2nd panel...opps! but keep going, I think when the next page comes there will be no confusion that its the satellite.
As promised
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PS. The Russian says "It [Yuri Gagarin] is buried in the Kremlin Wall in Moscow" or something like that, the morse says "I think they're on to us" and the Korean says "I love you" (according to my sister)
PPS. pfft what do satellites look like I dunno
i'm sure there'd be plenty of pictures of satellites on google images
page looks good though
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Best title I could come up with for this comic so far is 'Alfredo Saucer' (The alien's name is Alfredo, I may have mentioned that)
What do you guys think?
the panelling and drawings are nice, but i think you need to have more tone/value variation when it comes to foreground/background.
i dunno for some reason it just doesnt feel like the main characters are standing out enough from the bg
Quote from: vegetayou need to have more tone/value variation when it comes to foreground/background.
i dunno for some reason it just doesnt feel like the main characters are standing out enough from the bg
this is exactly what i was going to say
You did a good job with the checkering on her bandanna tho.
Oh gosh, I completely forgot about this topic for two months.
Here's the ones I've done since then. I've been trying to use more pure blacks to make it more visually interesting, and I think I might be getting the hang of it.
Let me know what you think.
Plus, CVG gave me some wording advice that I haven't incorporated yet because I'm a slacker.
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I really like how natural the poses are~
pacing issues
whole lotta time spent depicting the characters doing nothing interesting. (most webcomics are like that i guess)
the part where the characters are at work could have been shortened to give you space to present what's actually important (in this case, the breakup and the final scene) in a more dramatic, involving way
but nice art, keep it coming
breaking up via text, brutal
Quote from: HnilmikI really like how natural the poses are~
Thanks!
Quote from: Flashpacing issues
whole lotta time spent depicting the characters doing nothing interesting. (most webcomics are like that i guess)
the part where the characters are at work could have been shortened to give you space to present what's actually important (in this case, the breakup and the final scene) in a more dramatic, involving way
but nice art, keep it coming
I'm working on it!
Quote from: rtilbreaking up via text, brutal
That was the idea!
Oh how do I make it so my livestream is on the livestream list here so that I can do my comic on livestream and people can watch my livestream livestream?
just give me the name of your livestream channel. only i can add it
http://www.livestream.com/gregdraws?t=293265 (http://www.livestream.com/gregdraws?t=293265)
just needed the name not the url. but it's been added, thanks
DAMN that girl at the party is a BITCH
i like that the characters dont speak in perfect complete sentences
gj its looking good so far