Re-REGI-Nation cartoon script help

[Gregly]

I need help with my shitty, shitty script. First and foremost, it does not have an ending yet!

We all laugh, together.

Well the title's all weird because it sounds like 'regeneration', except it's about Regi, and there's a bunch of him so... nation?

Feel free to completely laugh at how horrible my script is if you can help me out here.

http://www.thebackalleys.com/dump/files/15...83qO_scrapt.txt <That is it.
As you can see (or are about to see) I didn't try very hard trying to make it a serious script. I thought it would at least read correctly though, but hey, we choose our battles.

In case you've forgotten what they look like:


I will upload a picture of Dr Nemeth soon, but until then just picture Doc Ock in your heads.

[Crabarms]

Nice drawings.

My advice for the script probably isn't too helpful

but the line:
REGI
It's the new chip! Anything that
falls off of me will regenerate on
me, but the part will regenerate
into a whole new me!

It seems redundant to use regenerate twice and doesn't fit when you mention it as becoming a clone. I know its just a start but I suggest maybe try to go for something like

"Its the new Chip! Once a part of me breaks off it will be able to regenerate back.
Not only that but the part that broke off will be able to become a clone."

Could probably make it sound better its just a suggestion

[Gregly]

Could probably make it sound better its just a suggestion

Sounds good! That's the kind of help I was looking for, anyway.

[slantedskarekrow]

EXT. THE CITY AGAIN- GWEN and REGI are doing SOMETHING that I HAVEN'T DECIDED ON YET. for some reason i just figured they would be eating ice cream from an ice cream stand and walking through the park or something.

for the ending maybe you could have the multiple regi's be helpful at first but eventually over whelming, in this situation Gwen and Regi have to remove all of the regeneration chips and get rid of the extras. in what way exactly is up to you i just figured that somehow things would need to be back to normal at the end. also perhaps leave it unclear if the one regi left at the end is the same one from the beginning by mentioning it or something.

besides being incomplete the script looked pretty good to me, and of course this is all just a suggestion.

[Gregly]

in what way exactly is up to you

Oh yeah! One of the ideas we had come up with was that they would be overwhelmed and start trying to destroy them, but more of them would keep showing up until Regi mentions that there is an off switch. and then they turn them all off.

Then maybe they could walk away and one of them could twitch or something. Cut to black?

[slantedskarekrow]

having an off switch sounds like an easy out, but it would be funny i guess if they tried a some other things first before anyone thinks to mention it.