The Animation I intended to show

YungJazz · February 4, 2009 01:43 AM

It's just a preview, the movements are kinda rough but I'm open to all advice for the rest of the flick. I implemented some new shit I've never used

mishkamash · February 4, 2009 01:47 AM

it looked stiff and fast throughout the whole thing

yeah i'd still work on it

Kirbopher · February 4, 2009 02:46 AM

Is this still being drawn with a mouse or with the tablet?

Zwickel · February 4, 2009 03:02 AM

Work on the motion a bit more, I'm liking the style tho

f0d · February 4, 2009 04:20 AM

i know its rough but i feel like theres not enough movement and the imagery doesnt match the soundtrack

i couldnt make out what ate the guy at the first part so the rest of it made no real sense whatsoever

show some horrible shit when the beep comes on not just quick little blood splatters. i would say darken the color of the blood too, its not even clear that its blood the way it is

drop the shot of the feet altogether

nice anatomy and such just needs a few more drawings

CoolDrMoney · February 4, 2009 05:10 AM

the most well animated part was the very first thing. The movements need work need to be more fluid

But thats what practice is all about

lenko · February 4, 2009 07:48 AM

i like the line colours and the animation is shapring up quite well. just add more and more detail and it'll be great, and very 'rich'

drop the dick joke, thats my only advice other than keep at it

Daveb0t · February 4, 2009 08:04 AM

get some more voice actors

or perhaps just a new narrator

ZekeySpaceyLizard · February 4, 2009 07:24 PM

halo font

Cornmander · February 4, 2009 10:35 PM

The waist is crazy tiny in the menu thing.

Fuzz · February 5, 2009 07:47 PM

New technology...

Blordow · February 6, 2009 12:59 AM

Quote from: Zekeyhalo font

yeah pretty much the worst font you could possibly choose

trent bortknob · February 6, 2009 08:46 PM

the narrator was really bad sorry but they made the whole cartoon's point just seem really gay

also the movements are pretty stiff

YungJazz · February 9, 2009 03:36 AM

Thanks for all the advice, I doubt I'm going to look back on this first 30 seconds of what I want to make 10 minutes, but I'll try to make the movements bettuh.