I'm trying to make a cartoon series...

dinky-dau · February 13, 2011 03:23 AM

So, I've been working on this idea for a sci-fi cartoon since around April of 2009. Since then, I've been working and re-working a script and playing with character design on and off for over a year. This show, if it ever gets off the ground, is going to be called Ursidae.

I recently finished what's going to be the opening to this cartoon, and this is the only place I felt comfortable posting it. It has certain flaws and wrinkles that have become obvious to me since I've been looking at it over and over, so I'll probably redo those bits when I get some free time. At any rate, I would be thankful for any suggestions on how to make this better.

Actually, this opening features a naked woman and a man getting his throat ripped out, so maybe this opening was just a bad idea altogether.

EDIT: I decided I wanted to make the opening a little more tasteful before putting it online. I mean, God, I don't even know what I was thinking.

Flash · February 13, 2011 03:44 AM

please by god make a good script like seriously jesus fucking christ i am so sick of watching people waster their time effort and talent with badly written pieces of shit seriously please i beg you

Gregly · February 13, 2011 04:04 PM

Lets hear more about it, then!
C'mon

lenko · February 13, 2011 04:13 PM

Quote from: Flashplease by god make a good script like seriously jesus fucking christ i am so sick of watching people waster their time effort and talent with badly written pieces of shit seriously please i beg you

or if you can't do this, swallow your pride and get somebody who can actually write

also what gregly said

i dunno post the plot and some character designs/bios/ideas its not like we can crit you on anything if you haven't got anything

Flash · February 13, 2011 06:26 PM

Quote from: vegetaor if you can't do this, swallow your pride and get somebody who can actually write

yeah but please make sure he can actually write, don't just call some guy you know that makes funny jokes and does funny shit at parties, because that's another BIG problem

dinky-dau · February 13, 2011 08:00 PM

Quote from: vegetai dunno post the plot and some character designs/bios/ideas its not like we can crit you on anything if you haven't got anything

All right then. Essestially, the plot revolves around a gigantic nuclear fallout shelter. Due to other plot threads that I'm keeping secret for now, making these gigantic shelters has become a priority for the US government. On the opening day for this shelter, thousands of people are allowed inside to test and critique its living conditions. But within a few hours time, people inside the shelter begin to change into massive, hulking zombies - people that have grown to twice their normal size and suddenly have a strange focus on killing people. Realizing the threat to the outside world that these creatures pose, the fallout shelter chooses to enclose the zombies inside its barriers until they can find a way to destroy them. To this end, scientists working in the shelter are forced to create guinea pigs on which to study the virus' effects. These guinea pigs are called the Ursidae.

The Ursidae in question are basically cartoon animals, but with the 'guinea pig' origin story to give them a reason to exist. I'll put up some more pictures of the characters once I have time to make better ones, but at the moment, this is what I have.

lenko · February 14, 2011 09:31 PM

seems like a pretty cute art style for the subject matter you were talking about in your first post

dinky-dau · February 14, 2011 10:30 PM

Quote from: vegetaseems like a pretty cute art style for the subject matter you were talking about in your first post

It is a pretty anachronistic art style compared to the tone of the cartoon, but the characters don't stay cute for long.

Also, most of the human characters are butt-ugly to contrast.

Sinitron · February 15, 2011 03:50 AM

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